5.04.2012

The Writer's Voice: #5 Extraction (YA Sci-fi)

Everyone, thanks for the lovely comments! I'm no longer in the contest, so I've taken down the query and first 250 words. :)

52 comments:

  1. Woo hoo! High five for making it in!

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  2. Hi Stephanie, I'm stopping by from the Writer's Voice Contest to wish you the best of luck! I'm following your blog now, so: nice to meet you.

    Your story and query both look great, too.

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  3. You know, I love this story. You need to let me read the rest of it soon :) This is such a great start - rooting for you! :)

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  4. Wow, this is good. You're a really good writer!

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  5. Sounds intriguing! And that's a great opening line! Good luck to you.

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  6. Congrats on making it in Steph! You and me are in the trenches together. All the best of luck!

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  7. Hey I think I read your query in the ABNA contest or something. Good luck! I'm #57 if you want to check me out.

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  8. Fellow Writers Voice entrant checking in - howdy!

    Ooo, I've seen this one before. Still think it sounds great. :) Good luck!

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  9. Wow! What a powerful set-up in that first 250! Good luck!!

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  10. Hi there! Glad to see you made it in. Here's wishing you the best of luck!

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  11. Best luck, from #30! Sci Fi all the way!

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  12. Stopping by to wish you luck. :)

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  13. This sounds like a great read! Best of luck to you!

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  14. sounds intriguing. Best of luck.

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  15. Just stopping by to say good luck! Great opening lines!

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  16. Ooh, I love what you've done with your query. I also love this line: In his fingers, he twirls a flower that could kill me.

    Good luck! I would definitely read this. :)

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  17. I like this Logan guy. He better be worth saving. :)

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  18. I've seen your query somewhere before, but I can't think where. Nice to see some of the writing that goes with it. Well done. Good luck! : )

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  19. Congrats on making it in, and best of luck!

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  20. Love this query! I've told you this though before. Great voice, unique plot. The first 250 sets the story up and I'm left as a reader wanting to know what's Clementine's scheme she's cooking up and how she's going to help Logan.

    Best wishes.

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  21. Congratulations on making the list, best of luck, and love the tension and world-building and everything so smoothly integrated into one here ^_^

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  22. Interesting premise. I really enjoyed the excerpt. Good luck!

    -Sarah #146

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  23. Great work here. You've got at least 3 big items that have me interested in figuring out what's going on. You've managed to do a great job of building a world in a small amount of words.

    Once again, good luck!

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  24. Really cool concept. Good luck!!!

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  25. Stopping by to say good luck one contestant to another!

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  26. Wow! Talk about intense opening! You really got right into it, didn't you? I love it :-) Good luck! -Darci #128

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  27. Love that first line. Good luck in the contest! #195

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  28. Sounds fascinating! Good luck!

    Brandi #199

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  29. Very interesting premise! Best of luck!!

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  30. Awesome! I saw your post on QT and thought I'd come take a look. I'm glad I did. You've got a great chance. Great premise. Great first line of the query!
    -Ryan
    #122

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  31. This opening has changed SO much since the draft I read. You did an awesome job! I'm glad we're in this together!

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  32. Oh! Interesting. DEADLY MOON IS DEADLY.

    This is a tad new to me (I'm not a big Sci-Fi reader) but it's an interesting concept.

    Now, if blogger will actually let me write this comment...

    Best of luck!

    - Cara #41

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  33. Ooh, interesting! Good luck!

    -Alex #85

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  34. The first line in your 250 was enough to keep me going. Good luck!

    Entry #31

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  35. Absolutely love the premise. I'm such a sucker for Sci Fi ;o) Great job on the 250 too. Good luck!!

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  36. I wish I could keep reading! Best of luck!

    Nikki (Entry #160)

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  37. I love the part about the moon... never thought about it that way. Very cool.

    Lisa (#59)

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  38. Fellow AQCer here to say hi :) I love how the Underground is first a refuge, and then it becomes a suffocation. I actually felt the change from your query. Really, really nice job with the change of mood! I want to know how she gets out and rescues Logan too. Nice work, and good luck!

    SC (#159)

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  39. Interesting concept. You caught my attention with the flower. :)

    Good luck!

    Tina (#194)

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  40. Love the premise of this. Love the last lines of the query, and the first and last lines of the opening. Best of luck!

    -George (#49)

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  41. Dear Stephanie,
    I love the suffocating nature you give to this opening – absolute classic. And the deadly flower is a page turner – not bad in 250 words.
    Good Luck Babe
    Cheers
    Jacky (#130)
    xxx

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  42. See, Clementine? YOU SHOULD HAVE NEVER LEFT LOGAN. (But I'm glad she did, because hey, otherwise, we would have never had this story.)

    YA Sci-fi YAY!!!! *geeky high-five* Rooting for you so hard!!!!

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  43. Very nice Stephanie! Love the intensity :)

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  44. Good Luck From Entry #165

    - Random Andrews

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  45. I love sci-fi.
    Best of luck!
    Carolyn, #157

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