5.04.2012

The Writer's Voice: #5 Extraction (YA Sci-fi)

Everyone, thanks for the lovely comments! I'm no longer in the contest, so I've taken down the query and first 250 words. :)
Posted by at 9:00 AM

50 comments:

  1. Sarah AhiersMay 3, 2012 at 9:47 AM

    Woo hoo! High five for making it in!

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  2. Matthew MacNishMay 3, 2012 at 9:50 AM

    Hi Stephanie, I'm stopping by from the Writer's Voice Contest to wish you the best of luck! I'm following your blog now, so: nice to meet you.

    Your story and query both look great, too.

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  3. MarcyKateMay 3, 2012 at 10:09 AM

    You know, I love this story. You need to let me read the rest of it soon :) This is such a great start - rooting for you! :)

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  4. Peaches LedwidgeMay 3, 2012 at 10:32 AM

    Good luck.

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  5. Paula JonesMay 3, 2012 at 11:06 AM

    Wow, this is good. You're a really good writer!

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  6. Cortney PearsonMay 3, 2012 at 11:44 AM

    Sounds intriguing! And that's a great opening line! Good luck to you.

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  7. Kelley LynnMay 3, 2012 at 12:11 PM

    Congrats on making it in Steph! You and me are in the trenches together. All the best of luck!

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  8. K.L. LaytonMay 3, 2012 at 12:49 PM

    Hey I think I read your query in the ABNA contest or something. Good luck! I'm #57 if you want to check me out.

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  9. Becca C.May 3, 2012 at 1:12 PM

    Fellow Writers Voice entrant checking in - howdy!

    Ooo, I've seen this one before. Still think it sounds great. :) Good luck!

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  10. Ann BradenMay 3, 2012 at 2:08 PM

    Wow! What a powerful set-up in that first 250! Good luck!!

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  11. Tonja DreckerMay 3, 2012 at 3:01 PM

    Hi there! Glad to see you made it in. Here's wishing you the best of luck!

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  12. Alaskan NinjaMay 3, 2012 at 3:13 PM

    Best luck, from #30! Sci Fi all the way!

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  13. Jennie BaileyMay 3, 2012 at 3:51 PM

    Stopped by to wish you luck!

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  14. SueJayMay 3, 2012 at 5:19 PM

    Nice opening! Good luck!

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  15. Mia K RoseMay 3, 2012 at 6:29 PM

    Stopping by to wish you luck. :)

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  16. UnknownMay 3, 2012 at 8:14 PM

    This sounds like a great read! Best of luck to you!

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  17. AliceMay 3, 2012 at 8:26 PM

    sounds intriguing. Best of luck.

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  18. Kimberly GabrielMay 3, 2012 at 9:34 PM

    Just stopping by to say good luck! Great opening lines!

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  19. Precy LarkinsMay 3, 2012 at 10:06 PM

    Ooh, I love what you've done with your query. I also love this line: In his fingers, he twirls a flower that could kill me.

    Good luck! I would definitely read this. :)

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  20. UnknownMay 3, 2012 at 10:12 PM

    I like this Logan guy. He better be worth saving. :)

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  21. Write LifeMay 3, 2012 at 11:16 PM

    I've seen your query somewhere before, but I can't think where. Nice to see some of the writing that goes with it. Well done. Good luck! : )

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  22. tlbodineMay 4, 2012 at 1:22 AM

    Congrats on making it in, and best of luck!

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  23. Joey FranciscoMay 4, 2012 at 8:22 AM

    Love this query! I've told you this though before. Great voice, unique plot. The first 250 sets the story up and I'm left as a reader wanting to know what's Clementine's scheme she's cooking up and how she's going to help Logan.

    Best wishes.

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  24. Loralie HallMay 4, 2012 at 9:53 AM

    Congratulations on making the list, best of luck, and love the tension and world-building and everything so smoothly integrated into one here ^_^

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  25. SarahMay 4, 2012 at 10:08 AM

    Interesting premise. I really enjoyed the excerpt. Good luck!

    -Sarah #146

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  26. Adam OsterMay 4, 2012 at 11:48 AM

    Great work here. You've got at least 3 big items that have me interested in figuring out what's going on. You've managed to do a great job of building a world in a small amount of words.

    Once again, good luck!

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  27. lexcadeMay 4, 2012 at 12:55 PM

    Really cool concept. Good luck!!!

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  28. April WallMay 4, 2012 at 1:34 PM

    Stopping by to say good luck one contestant to another!

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  29. Darci ColeMay 4, 2012 at 2:20 PM

    Wow! Talk about intense opening! You really got right into it, didn't you? I love it :-) Good luck! -Darci #128

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  30. Jaye Robin BrownMay 4, 2012 at 2:47 PM

    Love that first line. Good luck in the contest! #195

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  31. Brandi M. LynchMay 4, 2012 at 3:01 PM

    Sounds fascinating! Good luck!

    Brandi #199

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  32. Amalia DillinMay 4, 2012 at 3:42 PM

    Very interesting premise! Best of luck!!

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  33. RyanMay 4, 2012 at 4:47 PM

    Awesome! I saw your post on QT and thought I'd come take a look. I'm glad I did. You've got a great chance. Great premise. Great first line of the query!
    -Ryan
    #122

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  34. Stephanie S.May 4, 2012 at 6:03 PM

    This opening has changed SO much since the draft I read. You did an awesome job! I'm glad we're in this together!

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  35. Krysten HillMay 4, 2012 at 7:10 PM

    Oh! Interesting. DEADLY MOON IS DEADLY.

    This is a tad new to me (I'm not a big Sci-Fi reader) but it's an interesting concept.

    Now, if blogger will actually let me write this comment...

    Best of luck!

    - Cara #41

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  36. Alex HaymanMay 4, 2012 at 7:19 PM

    Ooh, interesting! Good luck!

    -Alex #85

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  37. Jamie CorriganMay 4, 2012 at 7:47 PM

    The first line in your 250 was enough to keep me going. Good luck!

    Entry #31

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  38. erica m. chapmanMay 4, 2012 at 7:56 PM

    Absolutely love the premise. I'm such a sucker for Sci Fi ;o) Great job on the 250 too. Good luck!!

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  39. AnonymousMay 4, 2012 at 8:45 PM

    I wish I could keep reading! Best of luck!

    Nikki (Entry #160)

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  40. AnonymousMay 4, 2012 at 10:20 PM

    I love the part about the moon... never thought about it that way. Very cool.

    Lisa (#59)

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  41. MonicaSanzMay 4, 2012 at 10:50 PM

    Best of luck! :)

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  42. SC AuthorMay 4, 2012 at 11:14 PM

    Fellow AQCer here to say hi :) I love how the Underground is first a refuge, and then it becomes a suffocation. I actually felt the change from your query. Really, really nice job with the change of mood! I want to know how she gets out and rescues Logan too. Nice work, and good luck!

    SC (#159)

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  43. Carrie ButlerMay 5, 2012 at 2:25 AM

    Good luck, Steph! :D

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  44. TYHatchMay 5, 2012 at 2:36 AM

    Interesting concept. You caught my attention with the flower. :)

    Good luck!

    Tina (#194)

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  45. George Anthony KulzMay 5, 2012 at 3:19 PM

    Love the premise of this. Love the last lines of the query, and the first and last lines of the opening. Best of luck!

    -George (#49)

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  46. Jacky GrayMay 5, 2012 at 8:11 PM

    Dear Stephanie,
    I love the suffocating nature you give to this opening – absolute classic. And the deadly flower is a page turner – not bad in 250 words.
    Good Luck Babe
    Cheers
    Jacky (#130)
    xxx

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  47. Leigh AnnMay 6, 2012 at 2:54 PM

    See, Clementine? YOU SHOULD HAVE NEVER LEFT LOGAN. (But I'm glad she did, because hey, otherwise, we would have never had this story.)

    YA Sci-fi YAY!!!! *geeky high-five* Rooting for you so hard!!!!

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  48. Jemi FraserMay 6, 2012 at 9:03 PM

    Very nice Stephanie! Love the intensity :)

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  49. Random AndrewsMay 7, 2012 at 2:16 AM

    Good Luck From Entry #165

    - Random Andrews

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  50. Carolyn AbiadMay 7, 2012 at 12:09 PM

    I love sci-fi.
    Best of luck!
    Carolyn, #157

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